Nirn Posted August 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Well now I just had a description rejected on another character for having a blue dragon as a mount. What sort of mounts are allowed then? What shall I replace it with? If I just remove it as asked I will probably get rejected for it being to short. Can anyone please tell me the guidelines for descriptions so I can understand better and not have to post? I thought I had a basic understanding but evidently not. Nirn Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twinblades713 Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 How can you be mounted on a Stallion/Charger/Battlemount/Elephant and a blue dragon at the same time? And why aren't you flying while you are mounted on the dragon? I think that's why. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jibber Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 1) YOUR DESCRIPTION SHOULD BE FORMATTED TO AT MOST 70 LETTERS PER LINE. Use word processor to write/format/spell check your description, then paste it into the mud's description editor. ("help editor") 2) Your description should be like a picture frozen in time. There should be no actions being performed, only descriptions of what the character looks like, or looks like he is doing. 3) You should NEVER force the looker to do, feel or think anything. The looker should make up their own minds about who you are, and what you might be doing. 4) The description should describe you, not your history. Concentrate on describing your characters stance, face, body, and their equipment. Not who they are, and where they came from. 5) Do NOT say how powerful, fearful, or deadly you are. The description is not the place to "stroke your ego" by saying how powerful you are and how fearful you look. Will your character always have a mount? Will you always be on top of a blue dragon, fighting, sleeping, resting sitting? Perhaps that's why the immortals rejected it. Take it out, and go into more depth of describing your character with the guidelines above. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dlysier Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 dragons can be killed But can you kill a floating red stone ... I dont think so! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Implementor Anume Posted August 31, 2009 Implementor Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 I'll give you your own oownered floating red stone yet Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Malchaeius Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 In all my time playing, I have only received one dragon. It was more for roleplay than it was for my description - although my description was above average. Nirn, since you want to bring this to a public forum, how about you post your description? After you have done such, I will rip it apart line by line. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dead Voodoo Doll Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 In all my time playing, I have only received one dragon. It was more for roleplay than it was for my description - although my description was above average. Nirn, since you want to bring this to a public forum, how about you post your description? After you have done such, I will rip it apart line by line. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jibber Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 I could probably post a description of mine that got me a dragon, but I'm sure everyone here could tear it apart and tell me why I shouldn't have received one Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twinblades713 Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 I could post a description that got me three dragons, before I realized I was being cheap and recycling so I stopped. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Questioner Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 I can post several descriptions that could have deserved rewards from different characters of other people. And yet, they did not receive a dragon or owner-only item. If anything, I can only see the dragon as being a form of stroking one's own ego. I have received two owner-only items and two custom made items. All of which were received through roleplay that was both intensive and in depth beyond just writing a description. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dizz Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 In all my time playing, I have only received one dragon. It was more for roleplay than it was for my description - although my description was above average. Nirn, since you want to bring this to a public forum, how about you post your description? After you have done such, I will rip it apart line by line. Sure, why don't you ask him to volunteer for the Carnifex while he's at it? Hmmm ? :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KRins Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 012345678901234567890123456789012345678901234567890123456789 A faint glow forms a pale blueish aura around an insect. On closer inspection, what seemed to be an insect is actually a very tiny, winged man. Pale skin, nearly transparent, faintly glows the same blue. Slanting jauntily, a tiny leaf is folded into a tiny tri-cornered hat and secured with a small ivory pin. The hat obscures the left eye, but a bright blue right eye focuses ever upward. Just as obscured, the left ear is invisible, but the right is generally normal, and comes to the slightest of points at the upper end. His nose is little more that slight bump, practically invisible to the naked eye. A bemused half-smile is a permanent piece of this tiny picture. Hanging from a thin silvery chain, a charm of enamelled iron is shaped into a red flame. The charm rests on a miniscule white cotton shirt, strings for securing hanging undone. White sleeves dangle down to thin wrists, and below black gloves of an unknown material protect even tinier hands. Transcluent wings, not unlike a butterfly's though devoid of color, trail behind him though never move despite his elevated position. Bisecting the tiny being, a black belt rests at a similar angle to his hat and suspend tiny green cotton shorts. Shins as thick as a needle trail down where the shorts stop just below the knee, falling to tiny bare feet that dangle nearly forgotten in the air. There is a very recent description that was deemed dragon worthy, accepted while I was offline via dcheck, and perhaps one of my better works of description writing. Feel free to blast it as you see fit. EDIT: Faerie description if it didn't jump out at you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Imoutgoodbye Posted September 1, 2009 Report Share Posted September 1, 2009 Feel free to blast it as you see fit. *******A faint glow forms a pale blueish aura around an insect. On closer inspection, what seemed to be an insect is actually a very tiny, winged man. Pale skin, nearly transparent, faintly glows the same blue. Slanting jauntily, a tiny leaf is folded into a tiny tri-cornered hat and secured with a small ivory pin. The hat obscures the left eye, but a bright blue right eye focuses ever upward. Just as obscured, the left ear is invisible, but the right is generally normal, and comes to the slightest of points at the upper end. His nose is little more that slight bump, practically invisible to the naked eye. A bemused half-smile is a permanent piece of this tiny picture. Hanging from a thin silvery chain, a charm of enamelled iron is shaped into a red flame. The charm rests on a miniscule white cotton shirt, strings for securing hanging undone. White sleeves dangle down to thin wrists, and below black gloves of an unknown material protect even tinier hands. Transcluent wings, not unlike a butterfly's though devoid of color, trail behind him though never move despite his elevated position. Bisecting the tiny being, a black belt rests at a similar angle to his hat and suspend tiny green cotton shorts. Shins as thick as a needle trail down where the shorts stop just below the knee, falling to tiny bare feet that dangle nearly forgotten in the air.*********** Okay! All issues are in BOLD. I'll take 'em in order. 1. Blueish. You can do better than making up adjectives. 2. Very is a word that doesn't exist, made up to quantify. There are other words that exist and look better in its place. 3. The word invisible/obscures in used so often in such a short time in a description is repetitive. Mix it up. 4 and 5. Generally and Normal. He's too small to be normal, but maybe too big by someone else's standards? You can do better. 6, 7, and 8. I don't like the word enameled. It reminds me of a tooth. Minuscule is another word I don't like. Translucent also. And all three are spelled wrong...might be why I don't like them... EDIT: For the record, the hat's sooooooooooo CUTE! OMG! It was like, gag me with a spoon CUTE! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KRins Posted September 1, 2009 Report Share Posted September 1, 2009 And the Reverend proves the exact point I wanted to...it isn't perfection that is required...it is showing some level of effort, and the good luck to catch the IMM's attention. I will say translucent was a typo...but I've spelled enameled and minuscule wrong my whole life...minus 5 points for me... It is my personal opinion that any description writing has to be for the self first. I wrote my description how I did, not with the hopes of a reward in mind...but because I genuinely enjoyed envisioning that character and putting that vision into words. I write my description assuming that I will be the only one to read it in depth, that X IMM will read it to assure it fits our RP setting and doesn't have some sort of trash, e.g vulgarity, mixed in instead of reading every word to savor the image as I did. Do first and foremost for yourselves my friends, any other version of recognition is sizzle and not the steak. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Imoutgoodbye Posted September 1, 2009 Report Share Posted September 1, 2009 And the Reverend proves the exact point I wanted to...it isn't perfection that is required...it is showing some level of effort' date=' and the good luck to catch the IMM's attention. I will say translucent was a typo...but I've spelled enameled and minuscule wrong my whole life...minus 5 points for me...[/quote'] I'm still in love with that hat. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KRins Posted September 1, 2009 Report Share Posted September 1, 2009 hats worn off kilter is like my tag for all descriptions...art imitates life I guess. My hat is always well off to the right of center in the real world, I guess it follows me into the world of fantasy as well. EDIT: I agree with your criticism Rev...it certainly isn't the finest description ever written. I think I just liked the taste of it, the texture was obviously...less than desirable. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Imoutgoodbye Posted September 1, 2009 Report Share Posted September 1, 2009 EDIT: I agree with your criticism Rev...it certainly isn't the finest description ever written. I think I just liked the taste of it' date=' the texture was obviously...less than desirable.[/quote'] I enjoyed it. It was good. But you told me to rip it apart. And I remember my Honors English class...we had a teacher everyone called The Rock or Big Red. I was one of the best writers she'd ever had in her class. Her own words. Then she proceeded to ride my *** into the ground. I still have nightmares over being verbs vs. acting verbs..... Actually, I lost count of the number of dragons I had....I don't even care anymore. I simply write the description so that it's passable and fits into my RP somehow. I've also written so many descriptions I'm going to barf if I write one more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nirn Posted September 1, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 1, 2009 Will I always have the blue dragon? As long as the description remained unchanged, yes. Just like the sword and knife and red dragon hide scale mail armor..... I don't actually have any of those in my inventory Equipment changes, I thought it was understood gear changes too often to keep up with it in a description? I changed it to a great big fat blue scorpian. Dont know if that will help. I just dont see the problem having a RP only pet/mount, more so if its in line with the individual character. The Blue Dragon was for a human Battle Mage, who happened to be L/E. Had he been L/G I would have gone for a good aligned dragon. Who better to tame a Dragon then a Sorcerer? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
English lad Posted September 1, 2009 Report Share Posted September 1, 2009 The fact is that mounts are ingame things though. You can get dragons to ride, as well as steeds, unicorns...whatever. You can't just give yourself one in a description because they are things you have to get via different means in game. If you are ever going to have a mount in game (Very likely) then how well that work? Are you going to be riding your blue dragon/scorpion whatever, on the back of your elephant? Or does the elephant ride the blue dragon? Basically mounts are a no no in descriptions because they are something you get in game, not something you give yourself in description. ************************** Edit: Oh and for reference Dragons really aren't 'that' good. I've probably received a dragon for 50% or so of my characters - some for description, some for RP, and i rarely keep them after level 35 or so, there are other things I want to put in that slot. Getting the blessing is important from a mechanical view point, but the dragon is a temporary thing - although i've always have RP fun with Dragons. If you are dead set on getting a dragon, RP it out, level up a bit, send out a few notes via the heralds that you are looking for a pet dragon, talk to people in game, and then once you have developed a RP that people recognise, drop an application to immortal - you'd be suprised what you can get this way if you are willing to put the RP work in. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Implementor Anume Posted September 1, 2009 Implementor Report Share Posted September 1, 2009 We do give dragons out for rp, but applying for one will usually not get you one. As to mounts, I personally rarely ever approve them in a desc, unless it is a Goliath (paladin) or a pet (ranger) / zombie (necro). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
delfytheelfy Posted September 1, 2009 Report Share Posted September 1, 2009 I got a dragon twice ever... Once because English is not my first language (you should have seen how bad it was when I got here. ) and I spent 2+ hours in newbie chat trying to work on my description and was lvl1 the whole time. Byrntest(sp?) gave me a dragon. I was like "wow thanks I didn't think my desc was that good" bry said " It wasn't, but you tried really hard heh" The second time, I got a picture off the internet and described to the tee. I believe it was 3-4 pages scrolled. They made me shorten it then gave me a dragon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
delfytheelfy Posted September 1, 2009 Report Share Posted September 1, 2009 We do give dragons out for rp, but applying for one will usually not get you one. As to mounts, I personally rarely ever approve them in a desc, unless it is a Goliath (paladin) or a pet (ranger) / zombie (necro). Here I sit mounted upon my great zombie of the great centaur king montaur. rofl that would be funny.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nirn Posted September 2, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 2, 2009 I never said my description was good, just that someone with a misspelled word got a dragon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nirn Posted September 2, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 2, 2009 ok I can see the point, will remove the mount all together and just go buy a scorpian or whatever. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dlysier Posted September 2, 2009 Report Share Posted September 2, 2009 ok if you really want a dragon just make sure before every thing you do and say put in a macro prefurably f1 that prays "this rp is twards the dragon your going to give me" so they know to watch you remember EVERYTHING YOU SAY! so example f1 "this rp is twards the dragon your going to give me" =you= Say " hello there how are you?" palwen says "im good, im just sitting here doing nothing like always" F1 you pray "this rp is for the dragon your going to give me" you say " wow thats nice" palwen "Im a carebare... thats what we do." F1 you pray "this rp is for the dragon your going to give me" Lysier comes out of the shadows and -+=assassinates=+- Palwen you say "Wow nice.. i dont like carebares either..." ++++++YOU have just been awarded a dragon+++++++ trust me it works i do it all the time... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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