EtsoShex Posted August 16, 2006 Report Share Posted August 16, 2006 Yeah yeah, I'm playing again. So much for a hiatus. Anyhow, since I've not written a description in a long time, I could use some help. What's a good thing to write instead of "Here stands," and so on? I tire of those. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
a-guitarist Posted August 17, 2006 Report Share Posted August 17, 2006 I grew tired of those, too. What I do is just start up the description minus that part. Flowing, white hair cascades down his elven ears and brow.... This creature's eyes pierce through the celestial lights of Aabarhan above... etc. a-g Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ophiel X Posted August 17, 2006 Report Share Posted August 17, 2006 i like to use the first line to set the tone, be it nasty or friendly. "before you is a tough as nails bastard with a scowl on his face" "directly in front of you is a charismatic freak, his face glowing with happiness" you shouldn't really use the word "stands" because after all, once you meet me you won't be standing anymore!! j/k i really agree with a-g tho, i'm getting tired of using an opening line at all Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Iusedtobesomebody Posted August 17, 2006 Report Share Posted August 17, 2006 use the first line to set the tone. i agree with a good "attention-grabber" as it begins. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Celerity Posted August 17, 2006 Report Share Posted August 17, 2006 <202hp 240mana 300mv 23000>look player A male feral. Please use the bio command for feature details or read on for an equipment list. A male feral is in excellent condition. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MeleeCrazy Posted August 19, 2006 Report Share Posted August 19, 2006 Only if our teachers had had the presence of mind to teach us how to write descriptions...instead of the "how to write a good paragraph" crap I was fed through school. I do tire of the same old style in descs. and I've dropped the standing befor you intro a long time ago, still like to have a flashy beginning though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deykari Posted August 19, 2006 Report Share Posted August 19, 2006 <202hp 240mana 300mv 23000>look player A male feral. Please use the bio command for feature details or read on for an equipment list. A male feral is in excellent condition. ROFL Dey Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Valsgarde Posted August 20, 2006 Report Share Posted August 20, 2006 Creativity is great - think of how the majority of the player base would say something, then say it a different way. Adjectives are your friend. Maybe I'm paranoid for thinking this, but if you can, I'd wait to submit my description until there's an immortal of a similar alignment on; I've that the best luck with goodies that way. Also, it seems to me that if you keep your description short and sweet but still really descriptive, packing all you can in a single fairly large paragraph? You're probably set, as far as some sweet IMM hookup-age is concerned. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deykari Posted August 20, 2006 Report Share Posted August 20, 2006 Creativity is all well and good, but IMO the whole purpose of a description is to merely describe your character. There's nothing wrong with taking pride in them and putting effort into them, but it doesn't matter if you're using something that isn't original, that isn't creative, that's overdone. If it is relatively short and describes your character, that's fine. Your description is a very small part of the overall character-building process in FL and whether you spent five minutes describing your character or much longer devising a literary masterpiece, it will ultimately do the same thing. Just my opinion anyway, Dey Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheNewGuy Posted August 20, 2006 Report Share Posted August 20, 2006 I agree. It would be strange if all ppl in Aabahran look like freaks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deykari Posted August 20, 2006 Report Share Posted August 20, 2006 I don't mean original in terms of what your character looks like, I mean original writing style. I love having strange and weird looking people. I just don't generally spend a lot of time over it trying to make it perfect. It's a description, and if it describes my character, then it'll do for me. Dey Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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