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Desc help?

Yeah yeah, I'm playing again. So much for a hiatus.

Anyhow, since I've not written a description in a long time, I could use some help. What's a good thing to write instead of "Here stands," and so on? I tire of those.

I grew tired of those, too. What I do is just start up the description minus that part.

Flowing, white hair cascades down his elven ears and brow....

This creature's eyes pierce through the celestial lights of Aabarhan above...

etc.

a-g

i like to use the first line to set the tone, be it nasty or friendly.

"before you is a tough as nails bastard with a scowl on his face"

"directly in front of you is a charismatic freak, his face glowing with happiness"

you shouldn't really use the word "stands" because after all, once you meet me you won't be standing anymore!! j/k

i really agree with a-g tho, i'm getting tired of using an opening line at all

use the first line to set the tone. i agree with a good "attention-grabber" as it begins.

<202hp 240mana 300mv 23000>look player

A male feral. Please use the bio command for feature details or read on for an equipment list.

A male feral is in excellent condition.

Only if our teachers had had the presence of mind to teach us how to write descriptions...instead of the "how to write a good paragraph" crap I was fed through school. I do tire of the same old style in descs. and I've dropped the standing befor you intro a long time ago, still like to have a flashy beginning though.

look player

A male feral. Please use the bio command for feature details or read on for an equipment list.

A male feral is in excellent condition.

ROFL

Dey

Creativity is great - think of how the majority of the player base would say something, then say it a different way. Adjectives are your friend. Maybe I'm paranoid for thinking this, but if you can, I'd wait to submit my description until there's an immortal of a similar alignment on; I've that the best luck with goodies that way. Also, it seems to me that if you keep your description short and sweet but still really descriptive, packing all you can in a single fairly large paragraph? You're probably set, as far as some sweet IMM hookup-age is concerned.

Creativity is all well and good, but IMO the whole purpose of a description is to merely describe your character. There's nothing wrong with taking pride in them and putting effort into them, but it doesn't matter if you're using something that isn't original, that isn't creative, that's overdone. If it is relatively short and describes your character, that's fine. Your description is a very small part of the overall character-building process in FL and whether you spent five minutes describing your character or much longer devising a literary masterpiece, it will ultimately do the same thing.

Just my opinion anyway,

Dey

I agree. It would be strange if all ppl in Aabahran look like freaks.

I don't mean original in terms of what your character looks like, I mean original writing style. I love having strange and weird looking people. I just don't generally spend a lot of time over it trying to make it perfect. It's a description, and if it describes my character, then it'll do for me.

Dey